Announcements and Reminders for Tuesday/Wednesday, March 20/21, 2018:
The exact time the vernal equinox is supposed to occur this year is
at 10:15 a.m. on Tuesday, March 20, according to the Farmer’s Almanac.
Spirit WeekMarch 16-20 Spirit Week!
Monday is College/Sports Jersey Day.
Tuesday is Tacky Tourist Tuesday.
Wednesday is Crazy Hat/Hair Day.
Thursday is Meme Day
Friday is Black Out Day.
Targets for Today:
I can spot and fix misplaced modifiers.
I can improve my essay about genetic engineering.
Today’s Agenda for Tuesday/Wednesday, March 20/21, 2018:
Reminder: Your Nonfiction Book of the Month is due Today!
1. Misplaced Modifiers: Pick up and complete the handout.
Misused Modifiers Worksheet.docx
– The patient was referred to a psychologist with several emotional problems.
Alison watched her son drive off through the window.
David waited patiently behind a teenager with baggy jeans carrying a full load.The homeowner chased the intruder wearing nothing but his underwear.
And the moral of these sentences is
--- carefully revise and edit your work.
2. Look at some poems
3. Back to your essays
Take notes in your composition book
under "Notes and QuickWrites"
Definitions: (Find these on our Google Classroom.)
Genetic engineering -- Genetic engineering is the process of manipulating an organism’s genome using biotechnology and the products of it are either referred to as “genetically modified” or “transgenic” organisms (BioExplorer).
Gene therapy -- Gene therapy is an experimental technique that uses genes to treat or prevent disease (Google Definition).
gene therapy definition. A promising technology that involves replacing a defective gene in the body with a healthy one. This can be done by removing cells from the body, using genetic engineering techniques to change defective sequences in the DNA, and then reinserting the cells (Dictionary.com).
GMO -- genetically modified organism
A GMO is an organism whose genome has been altered by the techniques of genetic engineering so that its DNA contains one or more genes not normally found there (Dictionary.com.
3A. -- The body analogy --
Compared to your argument essay, this informational essay is genetically modified.
straight down, oddly shaped
head is smaller
two abs no sixpack
(use both articles)
Most likely you will have a paragraph about the pros and a paragraph about the cons.
stubby legs (just a concluding sentence)
big beefy body paragraph with tiny head and legs
Your explanation (elaboration) should be at least twice as long as a quote or paraphrase, and for this essay should include clear examples.
3B. -- Preparing, Revising, Editing
Check your RAFTS, ARMS, and SMILES!
or use RADaR for Revision
Example of RevisionEarly draft:
2nd Body Paragraph:
While genetic engineering can be helpful in some ways, it can cause problems in others. For instance, those crops that have been genetically modified to resist diseases and pests may cause the diseases and pests to alter genetically. This means that efforts to make crops stronger are making their enemies stronger too.
Sample paragraph revision:
2nd Body Paragraph:
While genetic engineering can be helpful in some ways, it can cause problems in others. For instance, those crops that have been genetically modified to resist diseases and pests may be self-defeating. According to an article titled "Issue Overview: GMO's and Engineered Food," "Monsanto's [genetically modified] bug-killing corn is so widely used that the corn rootworm is developing a resistance" (Bloomberg). In other words, this insect pest that has been such a problem for corn growers is responding to genetically modified crops by genetically modifying itself, requiring even more pesticides to protect the corn crops. Efforts to make crops stronger seem to be making their enemies stronger too. Also, as reported in a brief about "Pest and Weed Resistance," "Worldwide, over 120 species of weeds have developed resistance to the dominant herbicides [weed killers] used with HT crops [crops that are genetically modified to not be affected by herbicides]" (GreenFacts). This means that new and perhaps stronger herbicides may be needed. The technology that sought to reduce the use of traditional herbicides may actually increase demand for them. Actually, many scientists admit that they do not yet know enough about how the widespread use of genetically modified crops will affect the ecosystems where they grow.
Another problem with genetic engineering is the development of allergens in genetically modified crops. . . .
For working on your Genetic Engineering Essays:
Explaining your quotes does NOT mean just repeating what they said. You need to ADD information.
Use your quotes or paraphrasing as explanation/elaboration on the point you are making.
Include the basics - who? what? where? when? why? how?
Facts and Statistics,
Use clear, understandable sentences.
Effective writers give enough detail for their non-expert readers to understand.
3C. More information available --
3D. Lab for revising your essays.
If You Were Absent:
Misused Modifiers Worksheet.docx
Continue to work on your essay about Genetic Engineering.
Today (March 16/19) -- Type your essay from the outline provided.
Revise: Add helpful information, especially elaborating.
Next time (March 20/21) -- Learn more about revising and especially about elaborating.
BTW: Your book project is due by the 21st.
The time after that (March 22/23) -- We will be in a lab to finish revising the essay. It is due by the end of the period.
You may also work on this from home.
Help and Enrichment
Second Example for the Nonfiction Book Project
Links and Documents:
If you have information from your science class that you would like to use in your essay, you are more than welcome to use it!
For citing, explaining, and showing how a quote or paraphrase relates to your topic, see examples here:
Introduce, Give, Cite, Explain, Show How It Relates
more modifiers: https://www.proofreadnow.com/blog/the-funny-business-of-misplaced-modifiers
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