Revise Your Own Essay

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A.R.M.S. Revision Strategy

Class A1, thank you! 

Add:     transitions words and punctuation to make sentences work citations hook background information book title and author's name* thesis sentence claim reasons -- topic sentence quotes/evidence explanation counterclaim  rebuttal conclusion

Remove:  contractions  extra words  repetition -- words, phrases ,   evidence   Move around:   evidence  body paragraphs  Substitute:  for contractions   a more effective quote a more effective word a more effective anything!  first and last name instead of just using first name in intro.

*Johnny Cade and Ponyboy Curtis, characters in the novel The Outsiders by S.E. Hinton, were walking in a city park when. . 

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For your own essay:  B5

Add:     book title and author's name* full names of characters strong evidence from the book citations  counterclaim

Remove:   I  or me contractions  Move around:    Substitute:

*Johnny Cade and Ponyboy Curtis, characters in the novel The Outsidersby S.E. Hinton, were walking in a city park when. . .  .

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punctuation -- commas 

For your own essay:  B7

Add:     book title and author's name* citations  -- 4-5 THESIS counterclaim/rebuttal

Remove:  off-topic  personal experiences too much repetition Move around:    reason better in another paragraph   evidence  Substitute:

*Johnny Cade and Ponyboy Curtis, characters in the novel The Outsiders by S.E. Hinton, were walking in a city park when. . .  .   

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