Wednesday, February 17, 2010

Example of Persuasive Essay from One of Our Own

by Rylaan

         My task is to convince you that you need to be able to feel emotions.  My view of this is that you need to be able to feel emotions to be able to do something great in life, and something bad.  To be able to feel emotions is a big part of our community.  We feel emotions every second of every day.

          First, we must feel emotion so we can feel love.  Have you ever felt loved in your life?  Because people before us have felt love every day from the second they were born, they love it.

        In, we must feel emotions to be able to feel proud.  Have you ever done something great that you thought was neat, if someone else saw you do it they couldn't tell you because it would make you feel proud.  Feeling proud is an important thing to feel because it builds self confidence and will help you do better in all that you do because you want to be able to feel that emotion.. If you could.

        Lastly another emotion we must feel is happiness.  We must feel happiness because without happiness the whole world would be sad.  If the whole world was sad then it would be dark and gloomy, have you ever seen a happy child, or one that just brightens your day from a bad mood to a good one?  The child possessed happiness and passed it on to you.  If you could pass that on to others then they would pass it one to others and then the whole city would be happy and would be having fun all together.  If the whole world could do that then we would not have wars or anything bad like that.


        You may bring up that why would you want to feel the bad emotions?  I would answer with "If there was no bad emotions could there be good emotions, and if there could it wouldn't it  just make the happy emotions even happier."


        Therefore, I think that you need to stop controlling your people's emotions and let them feel and react to them how they would want, like in our community.  You just need to let go it is okay to feel sad once in a while but you will get over it, and be loved also which is a great feeling. If you could feel proud of something that you did you would continue to do it and then it would make a lot of people happy. It is an outstanding idea to stop controlling emotions and let them do what they wish, it would make your community much more enjoyable and happier.

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