Using the comments on MyAccess -- If you have a grade on your introduction and thesis sentence on Skyward --
Go to My Portfolio.
Open the most recent draft of the essay "Is Johnny Guilty or Innocent?"
Look for comments.
Leave that tab open.
Open another tab for MyAccess.
Go to your assignments and open the most recent draft to revise and edit.
Use the comments and the embedded comments -- the colored text in the essay you opened from your portfolio.
Revise and carefully edit.
"Body" Organizer for an Argument Essay
The parts your argument essay should have:
←Introduction [You'll find the big idea -- the central idea -- of the whole essay here. The reasons are also stated.]
←Counterclaim Paragraph with the "But. . . "
← Conclusion [Your reader feels the he or she can walk away feeling satisfied.]
Sample: Summer Persuasive Essay
Another Sample:The School Uniform Question
Introduction with hook, background information, and one-sentence thesis statement that includes the claim and the reasons the claim is true
Individualism is a fundamental value in the United States. Balancing the right to express ourselves with other rights and needs of society and individuals can be difficult. This balancing act has become a hot topic in our public school classrooms. The issue is school uniforms. Should public school students be allowed to make individual decisions about clothing, or should all students be required to wear a uniform? School uniforms are actually the better choice because they simplify students’ lives, they help students act more responsibly, and they bring a feeling of equality to schools.
First body paragraph with transition, topic sentence, evidence, and elaboration
First, wearing school uniforms would help make students’ lives simpler. They would no longer have to decide what to wear every morning, sometimes trying on outfit after outfit in an effort to choose. Uniforms would not only save time but also would eliminate the stress often associated with this chore.
Second body paragraph with transition, topic sentence, evidence, and elaboration
Second, school uniforms influence students to act responsibly in groups and as individuals. Uniforms give students the message that school is a special place for learning. In addition, uniforms create a feeling of unity among students. For example, when students do something as a group, such as attend meetings in the auditorium or eat lunch in the cafeteria, the fact that they all wear the same uniform would create a sense of community. Even more important, statistics show the positive effects that school uniforms have on violence and truancy. *According to a recent survey in Hillsborough County, Florida, incidents of school violence dropped by 50 per cent, attendance and test scores improved, and student suspensions declined approximately 30 per cent after school uniforms were introduced.
*The same sort of findings came in a study by Virginia Draa, assistant professor at Youngstown State University in Ohio (Wilde, 2012).
Third body paragraph with transition, topic sentence, evidence, and elaboration
Finally, school uniforms would help make all the students feel equal. People’s standards of living differ greatly, and some people are well-off while others are not. People sometimes forget that school is a place to get education, not to promote a “fashion show.” Implementing mandatory school uniforms would make all the students look the same regardless of their financial status. School uniforms would promote pride and help to raise the self-esteem of students who cannot afford to wear stylish clothing.
How would you convince your parents to get you a smart phone?
Mom, ya oughta get me a smart phone.
What reasons would you use?
Create a thesis sentence for an argument. Make it formal.
So you write in the third person.
In the United States, 73 percent of teens own or have access to a smartphone. A mere 12 percent have no cell phone. Those numbers come from a 2015 survey by the Pew Research Center in Washington, D.C.