Group Practice! Write your revised sentences in your Writer’s Notebook under Notes and Quickwrites. Show relationships among each set of sentences using words (transitions) that show the relationships among the parts. You will most likely want to combine some of the sentences.
Below are SOME of the ways you could do this. You may have some that are equally as good, or even better.
1. Harry’s aunt and uncle hate him. They are scared of his magic.
They left him alone that summer.
Harry's aunt and uncle hate him because they are scared of his magic.
Therefore, they left him alone that summer.
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Harry's aunt and uncle hate him and are scared of his magic, so they left him alone that summer.
Harry's aunt and uncle hate him because they are scared of his magic.
Therefore, they left him alone that summer.
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Harry's aunt and uncle hate him and are scared of his magic, so they left him alone that summer.
2. Hermione is the brightest witch her age. She is difficult to get along with.
Hermione is the brightest witch her age, but she is difficult to get along with.
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Hermione is the brightest witch her age. However, she is difficult to get along with.
Hermione is the brightest witch her age, but she is difficult to get along with.
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Hermione is the brightest witch her age. However, she is difficult to get along with.
3. Polyjuice Potion lets people who drink it look like someone else. Harry and Ron drank some Polyjuice Potion. They were able to sneak into the Slytherin common room and spy on Draco.
Polyjuice Potion lets people who drink it look like someone else. When Harry and Ron drank some Polyjuice Potion, they were able to sneak into the Slytherin common room and spy on Draco.
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Whereas Polyjuice Potion lets people who drink it look like someone else, Harry and Ron drank some Polyjuice Potion, and they were able to sneak into the Slytherin common room and spy on Draco.
Polyjuice Potion lets people who drink it look like someone else. When Harry and Ron drank some Polyjuice Potion, they were able to sneak into the Slytherin common room and spy on Draco.
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Whereas Polyjuice Potion lets people who drink it look like someone else, Harry and Ron drank some Polyjuice Potion, and they were able to sneak into the Slytherin common room and spy on Draco.
4. I think Snape is a good teacher. He pushes his students to work hard. He knows his subject. He doesn’t smile. He saves Harry’s life, which is most important.
I think Snape is a good teacher because he pushes his students to work hard and he knows his subject. He doesn’t smile, but he saves Harry’s life, which is most important.
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I think Snape is a good teacher since he pushes his students to work hard. In addition, he knows his subject. He doesn’t smile. However, he saves Harry’s life, which is most important.
I think Snape is a good teacher because he pushes his students to work hard and he knows his subject. He doesn’t smile, but he saves Harry’s life, which is most important.
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I think Snape is a good teacher since he pushes his students to work hard. In addition, he knows his subject. He doesn’t smile. However, he saves Harry’s life, which is most important.
5. It is a good thing that Hermione married Ron. Her biggest fights were always with Ron. Harry was too self-centered to notice her.
It is a good thing that Hermione married Ron. Her biggest fights were always with Ron because Harry was too self-centered to notice her.
It is a good thing that Hermione married Ron. Her biggest fights were always with Ron because Harry was too self-centered to notice her.
It is a good thing that Hermione married Ron because her biggest fights were always with him. On the other hand, Harry was too self-centered to notice her.
