A1 What makes good writing?
correct spelling
good punctuation not too short not too complicated -- consider your audience descriptive words makes sense facts -- you learn from it |
cites the author, source not overly detailed purpose and audience on topic understandable comparison -- metaphor |
correct spelling
get them hooked details but not over-detailed stay on topic capitalization Purpose Audience interesting |
title
organization -- easy to read detail if characters, give enough detail so the reader can connect cliff-hangers, suspense, something that will pull the reader through |
punctuation --
character flaws (not perfect) spelling -- makes sense good plot -- interesting story target audience -- consider your audience understandable needs detail -- |
enough detail and elaboration
correct spelling vocabulary -- effective words correct use of the word "your," "you're." punctuation capitalization interesting story/plot/.. . . appropriate to the audience explained without being overly long or detailed Good conventions an analogy smooth reading -- fluency example something to visualize detail, but not too much |
sentence variety
use synonyms/pronoun effectively -- she, Jill, pronouns clear reader-friendly succinct/ to the point detailed information quotes citations to much/ |
Version 1
Chimpanzees can be very aggressive and violent.
Version 2
the mail chimps orgunized the hunt as if thay were generuls in a campain first they chased the tearified red colobus troop through the treetops the female chimps staid on the grond screaming madly to confus the monkeys the colobus mails turned back and cunfronted the chimps to allow there females and young too flea they put up a fears fight with chimps that where many times they're size finally traped they where over whelmed and killd (Lewin 46).
Version 4
The male chimps organized the hunt as if they were generals in a campaign. First, they chased the terrified red colobus troop through the treetops. The female chimps stayed on the ground, screaming madly to confuse the monkeys. The colobus males turned back and confronted the chimps to allow their females and young to flee. They put up a fierce fight with chimps that were many times their size. Finally trapped, they were overwhelmed and killed (Lewin 46).
From Tooth and Claw by Ted Lewin, HarperCollins, 2003.
Version 3
My own reasons for interest in the evolution of aggression began with a personal
exposure to inter-group hostility among chimpanzees in the early 1970s. Such
interactions were then being detected for the first time.. . . The “real controversy”, S&M suggest, lies in the question “just how common is
coalitionary conspecific killing in chimpanzees?”. . . In a survey of nine
study communities in the five longest-studied populations of chimpanzees with more than
one community, Wrangham et al (2006) reported that the median risk of violent death for
chimpanzees from inter-community killing (69-287 per 100,000 per year) fell in the same
order of magnitude as the median reported values for rates of death from warfare among
subsistence-society hunters and farmers (164 and 595 per 100,000 per year, respectively).
From Wrangham, Richard W. 2010. Chimpanzee violence is a serious
topic: A response to Sussman and Marshak’s Critique of Demonic
Males: Apes and the Origins of Human Violence. Global
Nonkilling Working Papers 1:29-47.
The male chimps organized the hunt as if they were generals in a campaign. First, they chased the terrified red colobus troop through the treetops. The female chimps stayed on the ground, screaming madly to confuse the monkeys. The colobus males turned back and confronted the chimps to allow their females and young to flee. They put up a fierce fight with chimps that were many times their size. Finally trapped, they were overwhelmed and killed (Lewin 46).
From Tooth and Claw by Ted Lewin, HarperCollins, 2003.
_______________________________________________
Purpose
Audience
6-Traits
